Moriah Leila

Okay, I originally thought, aw a cute poem for her friend. Except it kind of turned out where you were talking about yourself the whole time. Sure you mentioned that ...

This was a cute poem. Very brief and to the point. My only real critique was the second to last line. You wrote: You can keep my heart And for ...

Wow, this is a very powerful poem. I mean, you're dealing with a lot of heavy issues here. And I felt like you just kind of skimmed over them, emotionally. ...

So seriously, this poem was like a love/hate relationship for me. There were parts that I absolutely loved and there were other parts that I hated. I want to sit ...

Yeah Jak, I think you should do something about making this more clear. Because I really thought you had just put a jumble of words together and expected it to ...

I thought it a lovely poem. Your ryhming didn't feel forced and the overall idea was cohesive. You did have some great lines, and I actually liked the line about ...

I thought this was an interesting poem. People can rely so heavily on simple things to relieve them of the mediocrity of their lives, even if it is a silly ...

I agree with Empress, I totally didn't see the Dad coming into this. I just thought it was another angsty teenaged poem about teenaged love, but the Dad part made ...

I really like this poem, as it has a historical aura about it, and I love that. I really enjoyed the part about the earl gray not being spilled on ...

Wow, I thought this poem was so powerful and truthful. I love the ending. And I like the part about the cemetary being a wave of gravestones. Such great imagery! ...

Okay, my major problem with this was how you forced the rhyme. It was obvious that you were trying to get the lines to rhyme, as none of them really ...

I really enjoyed this poem. It is hard to be content when you are focusing on something so superficial as your physical appearance. Beauty fades with age, and so one ...

I really have to agree with Snoink and Kamas on this one. We need more imagery, as you seem to be telling us everything that is happening. It makes this ...

While the imagery is very good, I felt like you were trying too hard. Maybe you used too many adjectives. I just felt like there was no story, no purpose ...

I disagree with Smorgishborg, I don't think you necessarily to come away from a poem with a new understanding or changed outlook on life. Sometimes it is nice just to ...